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Post by kei on Jun 26, 2013 8:15:12 GMT
Hey fruitbat - that's great. Whenever you are ready.  I think that means you can post your paragraph in the story line, James.
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Post by fruitbat on Jun 26, 2013 10:56:02 GMT
My suggested next section:
“There appears to breach in the hull, professor. I am trying to rectify the issue now.”
Tegraine could feel a sickening lurch as his stomach reacted to the increased velocity at which the ship descended towards the alien planet. With his third eye, Tegraine began to see visions of the ship’s exterior, a hole the size of an armchair on the starboard side, wiring that should have been attached to something crucial now flying in chaotic banners along the side of the hull. But this was far from the worst that he witnessed. Books; unique, priceless, irreplaceable, peerless and in his care, were fluttering away and out into nothingness.
Tegraine knew that despite Ahura’s superior skills in navigation, there was nothing that even she could do with a breach this large. He was glad of the safety web. Tegraine re-covered his third eye and prepared for impact. He tried not to think of the loss of knowledge he had just witnessed.
“Professor, I have assessed the damage and have calculated that there is no alternative but to activate the emergency landing protocol. Hold on tight, sir.”
“That’s what I’m doing Ahura.”
Seconds later, Tegraine felt a blow to his body that shook every bone, despite the safety web that secured him. The ground, the walls, the very air vibrated with a sonic boom that ripped through the craft and the control bridge at which he sat. There was a sickening silence, followed by the squeak and shudder of metal bending and cracking.
“It appears that we have arrived on the planet Khula. Apologies for the rough landing, professor. The emergency landing procedure is due an upgrade.” Tegraine moved his arms and legs experimentally and was pleased to discover they were still in working order.
“That, Ahura, is an understatement. Even for you.”
“Coffee, sir?”
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Post by kei on Jun 26, 2013 11:07:49 GMT
 Love it. The ending of that section is perfect! good idea with the books flying through the damage in the side too. they're gonna be well and truly scattered -gonna have our work cut out for us.
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Post by fruitbat on Jun 26, 2013 11:15:28 GMT
Yes, we are! It's going to be fun, though!
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Post by kei on Jun 26, 2013 11:19:28 GMT
Definitely. 
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Post by kei on Jun 27, 2013 10:31:44 GMT
If you want to post your paragraph on the written in ink storyline, Fruitbat, I will begin to compose the next paragraph. I will try to get it up sometime tomorrow afternoon - in the meantime the judges have decided on winners for the Latest competition and i have to organise delivery of prizes and finish the prep for the the next competition. Feel free to enter it - It will be theme 'Escape' See the website blog for more info. (I'll be back tomorrow - in the internet cafe most likely around 2)
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Post by fruitbat on Jun 27, 2013 20:18:32 GMT
Ok, will post my paragraph and look forward to reading the next! I am already mulling over an idea for the 'Escape' theme. I like it!
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Post by kei on Jul 2, 2013 11:04:14 GMT
Sorry I went missing guys (was kidnapped by by parents who needed help in there village in the back end of no where - really fell behind on everything. Back on track now.) My proposed next paragraph:
'Coffee,' Tegraine thought as he took breaths to help himself calm down. 'Why they had to equip the ship with a sense of humor is beyond me.' The safety web melted away and he got shakily to his feet. "What happened, Ahrua?" "After a collision with a missile we descended at the unsafe angle of 142 degrees with the not so great speed of 82 miles an hour hitting the trees with enough force to snap off the topmost branches bringing our unscheduled sub-orbital descent to a rough halt on the not so firm land of Khula. To use simpler terms for your exhausted mind; we were shot down." Professor Tegraine closed all three eyes as he willed patience to be on his side. "By who?" "Unknown." "Great." "Professor, there is a ship approaching, would you like me to hail them and request assistance?" "Do it, I'll see where we are." Walking across the bridge, Tegraine began to open the doors leading to the unknown world outside. "Professor my request for aid has received an alarming response of negative feedback - I do not believe the approaching ship is friendly. The life forms on the approaching ship may be the owners of the missile."
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Post by kei on Jul 2, 2013 11:06:11 GMT
just wondering where we landed I've kinda suggested near trees, maybe a forest. Not so firm land, rocks in a swamp, or soft mud? depends I guess on James interpretation on the next paragraph if you are both in agreement with my current one.
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Post by fruitbat on Jul 2, 2013 11:11:59 GMT
Yes, I like the idea of landing near trees. The ending is well set up for tension in that anything could happen next. I really like it!
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Post by kei on Jul 2, 2013 11:14:48 GMT
Thanks Fruitbat. it was your ending with the coffee that allowed me to roll on.
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Post by james on Jul 2, 2013 12:03:20 GMT
Like it! Hmm onward...
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Post by james on Jul 2, 2013 19:34:36 GMT
Can I just apologise? I'm away this week and only have my phone to work on so please ignore any random auto corrects etc I'll tidy it up when I get back if that's ok?
"Do they want their missile back? No silly. Er perhaps not," he finished, backing away from the door. "Best stay inside, don't you think Ahura?" "Indeed, they are firing again." The librarian had to steady himself as a series of small explosions rocked the ship. "Smaller munitions this time. I'm getting a transmission. Apparently we need to surrender our cargo or we will be destroyed. They have given us one ursong to comply, I calculate that that gives us fifteen minutes to do something." "Oh dear. We can't possibly give up the books. The library doesn't go around collecting the rarest books just so anybody can come and take them." "Time is running short. I'm afraid that I don't have the fire power to fight them off. Now we are grounded I could boost shield to hold them for a while." "But we would have to surrender eventually. I have the beginnings of a plan." "They are calling again, demanding an answer." "Could you eject a small package without leaving us too vulnerable?" "Yes.what do you have I'm mind? They well surly scan anything before they pick it up. No pirate wants to take a bomb on board." "tell them I am sending them a sample of my wars in the hope that they will understand it's worth and therefore know why I must continue unhindered." "I doubt that will work." "Just tell them, and then I need some uninterrupted time with my books."
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Post by james on Jul 2, 2013 19:38:19 GMT
I'm not sure if I've written the librarian a bit off character. Sorry I can't write and then proof properly at the mo.
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Post by kei on Jul 3, 2013 8:31:18 GMT
That's good James. I like it, we can definitely work with that Have fun where ever you are
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